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Portfolio Reflection

Posted: November 12, 2010 in Portfolio

Unit Reflection and Response

 

  1. Pick any two of your writing pieces and write a short justification as to why you have chosen to categorize them under a particular Orwellian purpose.

 

Piece 1 Credo                                        Purpose Egotistical, Political

 

Justification (make specific reference to your text)

This piece could be identified as Egotistical because this piece generally describes my ideas and views on certain aspects of my life. Hence, it can also be identified as a Political Piece because in this piece I express my views using strong and bold statements (red color).                              /4

 

Piece 2 Opinion Piece                    Purpose Aesthetic, Political

 

Justification (make specific reference to your text)

In this piece I picked a certain topic and I described clearly why I think “Family” was important to me. So the reason why this piece is political is because it’s MY thoughts that I wrote about, and since I described it in detail, so it can also be identified as being a aesthetic piece.      /4

 

  1. Which of your pieces was the most challenging to write? Give three reasons and explain.                                                      /3

I think the Restaurant review was the hardest to write. At first when we had to walk for more than 20 minutes to the hotel that was very well “camouflaged” in the forest of tall buildings, I already had a fairly bad impression on the restaurant. So throughout the process it was hard for me not to dwell on that “grudge” and be non-biased when I took notes for the review. Also it was challenging to link the paragraphs together using effective transitions, which was one of my weaknesses in writing. Lastly it was difficult to describe the food and service in such way that wouldn’t bore my audience to death, because for some parts I almost got bored to sleep too.

 

  1. Which of your pieces was the most enjoyable to write?  Give three reasons and explain.                                                           /3

I would say I enjoyed writing the Credo, because through that piece I could describe my thoughts and opinions in my own style. In this case it would be each thought described in one bold sentence. Also it was very relatable to my own life because sometimes I just felt like I really needed someone to believe in me. As I said at the last part of the credo, “I Believe in anyone who is willing to believe in me and recognize my strengths”.

 

  1. What are your strengths and weaknesses as a writer?                      /4

My strengths would be the ability to portray objects or events in very descriptive ways and also consider my writing style pretty interesting for the reader. My weaknesses on the other hand would be transitioning from different points to another, as seen in the restaurant review. Also I tend to make quite a bit of grammatical mistakes or miss out words when I write too fast.

 

  1. A future career or field of study I am considering is Business/Hospitality Management, if not management I would likely choose General Business/Economics   /3

5.

  1. What kind(s) of writing described by Orwell might be important in this career or field? Give specific examples.

I thinking Political and Historical is the most important, to be in this career I should be political because to manage effectively, I must describe my own ideas and thoughts to my colleagues, also historical because in management, referring to past examples would be very helpful in modeling a style of management and also learn from the mistakes from the former workers in the field.

 

  1. What advice would you offer ICS Advanced Composition teachers as they plan this unit for next year? What might be some additional pieces of writing to add and why? How was the timing and pacing? Did you receive enough feedback? Did you receive enough instruction and input so you knew how to do each assignment? You can make specific comments about specific assignments here. What did you like or not like and why? What would make this unit more student friendly, provide more learning, or make it more interesting?                                                       /5

 

I think in order to make this unit more student friendly, future advanced composition teachers could offer a movie or video game review. Since a lot of us prefer simply enjoying our meal instead of taking notes along the way. It would be more relatable for us to write movie and video game reviews because these are topics that us students discuss about in our free time, and we would be able to review the movie afterwards without having to refer our notes too much. Also I really appreciated the idea of a Credo. It’s a very powerful way to express our opinions and feelings through a brief and explicit manner.

 

After completing this reflection paper post it on your blog and send it to your teacher.

 

 

 

 

Peer Feedback

Feedback from our peers helps us to become better writers. It can inspire us to keep writing and nudge us in the right direction when we need to think ‘outside the box’ about our writing. Giving feedback to other writers in turn improves our ability to look at writing objectively. As we give feedback we learn new things we can use in our own writing.

You are required to give feedback on five pieces of your classmates’ writing. You can add it in the comments section on your classmate’s blog. Your teacher will tell you whose blog you will respond to. Your feedback should be positive, helpful and constructive. You need to write a good paragraph and make at least three clear points for each piece you comment on. Make specific reference to text. Avoid general words like ‘awesome’, ‘interesting’, ‘nice’ or ‘good’. Make your comments specific and detailed. After you make each comment cut and paste it into the document below. Send that document to me.

Here are some things you might consider writing about as you give feedback:

  • How did the author’s personality or life experience give voice to their piece?
  • What has happened to you that is similar or very different to what has happened to the author?
  • Does the piece remind you of a book you have read, a news or historical event you’ve heard about, bring to mind a certain quote or make you think about a movie you have seen? Write about these connections.
  • What emotions did the piece evoke in you and why?
  • What was the message or point the author was trying to get across. Do you agree or disagree with them and why?
  • Which phrases in the piece stood out for you and why? Did you learn any new words while reading this piece?
  • What literary techniques did they use effectively or not so effectively?
  • What is something new you learned from this piece, about the author or about something they wrote about?
  • Did you find anything about the piece surprising? Why?
  • Comment on the artwork or photography that accompanies a piece. What do you appreciate or not appreciate about it? How does it add or detract from the effectiveness of the piece.
  • Did the piece give you an idea for something you would like to write about? Why and what?
  • Who do you think might be a suitable target audience for this piece? Why?
  • Is there something in the piece you found humorous? What and why?
  • Do you have other suggestions for topics or genres you think this author should try? Why?
  • There are seven traits of effective writing – Ideas and Content, Organization, Voice, Conventions, Sentence Fluency, Word Choice, and Presentation. Which of these traits has the author really mastered? Give examples. What traits might still need a little work? Give suggestions. You may also choose to comment on just one of the traits and how and why you think the author excels at that trait.

Peer Feedback Comments

These comments need to be posted in classmates’ blogs AND sent to me

Your name Nick Jim

ONE

Classmate Stephanie Chin                                       Writing Piece Credo

I really loved the simple layout of this credo, both the background, fonts and also the style of this piece. It’s short but straight to the point, also it really touches my heart where it said “bring joy and happiness to a person…and they would pass it on to another person”. If everyone in this world did that wouldn’t it be great! One thing though, the way you put published it could be better, since the piece and the comment section are not on the same page, I had to flick back and forth to make sure my comment was actually relevant. Anyway great piece here!

 

TWO

Classmate Nathania Ho                                          Writing Piece Credo

This piece is very descriptive, I really liked the part where you compared our freedom with freeing a salmon, very interesting analogy there:). Also I’m sure a lot of people would agree with your belief in “striving for excellence”! Lastly I think the part where you said “I believe that there is something out of this world, it kind of reminds of our show choir theme this year “I believe there is more!”

THREE

Classmate Hilaire Chow                                      Writing Piece Opinion Piece

Nice picture! I really agree with the statement that you’ve made up their, that sometimes we stress over grades too much and we barely go out and have fun! After this I asked myself this question: what is out there more than and school and grades? It also reminded me to prioritize my stuff and balance them in my daily life. A really nice piece good job!

 

FOUR

Classmate Sasha Cheung                                  Writing Piece Family Story

After reading this piece I got a general idea of how interesting your brother is and the way you two interact with each other. I liked how you mentioned some of the events that happen, especially the part where he would “dust his feet” onto your bed! That one made me laugh! Good job 😀

 

FIVE

Classmate Tiffany Choi                                      Writing Piece Restaurant Review

I really liked how you wrote this piece in a descriptive, informative and simple manner. Having read this I’m officially starving again. Also I learned a lot from this restaurant review you made, in my future writings I need to try to be descriptive but also avoiding cliche and repetitive words that bore the audience. Anyhow I suggest that for the first sentence you should write the word “refresh” in capital letters as well to emphasize it. A very good piece!

Extra Credit

Classmate Stephanie Chin                                Writing About Me

This is a very interesting piece for me to read, I liked how you wrote this in a casual but descriptive way! Although despite the casualness I think you need to be aware of some minor grammatical mistakes. Other than that this is a really nice piece!